Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Sep 11, 2011

Escape (fear poem for emotions workshop)

Escape

Mirror, Mirror on the wall,
Who's that woman 'bout to fall?
She, with hair of silver and gold,
advancing in years and dreams untold.
Ghosts and demons at her heels,
caring not for her plaintive appeals.
On her trail, they have her scent.
She runs on energy nearly spent,
For to find safe haven's arms,
To protect her from craven harms.
Evils meant to undo her soul,
Chase her to death’s dark atoll.
Running hard through the night,
Barely daring to win this fight,
Stumbling over stone and rock,
Time grows ever shorter: tic-tock.
If she can but out distance this throng,
She’ll soon hear morning’s sweet song.
If she can but make the dawn,
They will turn to smoke, their power gone.
ash to ash and dust to dust,
they lose this time by her footfall’s thrust.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Poem about fear without using the word "fear" for emotions workshop.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

Candlewitch

This one almost wrote itself... (It is the Envy poem I struggled so hard with!) Thanks for your input.

always, Cat

R

raj

13 years 7 months ago

not only does this poem express fear but what i marvel about is its flow and cadence...it is as smooth as silk...

Candlewitch

Thank you, Raj! A poem is nothing without a good reader to compliment it! Your comments are very welcome.

always, Cat

lou

lou

13 years 7 months ago

I could certainly feel fear at my heels.

lou

Candlewitch

Thanks for reading. Your participation is greatly appreciated.

always, Cat