In the frolic of
folly i amaze
into metaphorical mystery
i gaze.
Stark naked eyes
unknowing
the blank.
A mysery self-wrought
in the brooks
and
woods walked.
Then the last breath
shall surge
half in half out.
My soul if i have one
may submerge
In the glorification
of time
I thought
was once only mine..
Sep 03, 2011
My time is not up yet
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
You are getting better and better.
my only crit is the line-
of dare i say
I think is un-necessary. Can you explain to me why it is there?
Love the poem.
I agree with Jess Joe
I agree with Jess
Joe
and i agree with you both ....thanks
Its so nice to hear comforting words
thanks again all ur good wishes
Maybe,
Maybe your time has just begaun, nice poem. Regards Roscoe...
thanks
for this as well as msg pm