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Aug 29, 2011

STOLEN GLANCES

Bar me not from gazing on
the form which sets my blood on fire
and has done so for many a year.
Don't reward my gaze with flippant ire
in attempt to quash growing desire.

That mirror you depend on so
only shows a flawed reflection.
It never shows what I behold
when I chance to look in your direction,
stealing a glance of near perfection.

So sit there with your puzzle book.
I'll sit here with note pad on my knee.
With pen in hand and love in heart
let me describe what most don't see
and put it into poetry.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

S

Sometimes I'll be sitting around with Susan while she's working on a puzzle of some type and I get caught staring at her . I then get told to stop that lol. This poem is the result...........stan

S

Once a poem hits the stream it no longer belongs to the writer and will be interpreted in any way the reader pleases lol. this is as should be. I just put my intent in case you had completely missed my meaning, should have known better..........stan

loved

loved

13 years 8 months ago

Future Poet

A lady poet was recently asked
How she managed
To be able to publish her book of poetry
She replied
When I was ten, getting bored,
My mom asked me not to idle,
Then what should I do she asked,
Write a poem
Thereafter she never stopped
And
Today she has published her book of poems
And
Her mom is her publisher, editor and reader.

Best of luck to you,
You are the future potential
Of all poets here

lou

lou

13 years 8 months ago

Let the critique police hunt me down LOL!!

It was simply beautiful

Love Lou

S

There is a warrant out on you lol. Thank you for your kind comment...................stan

S

See, I Do use suggestions sometimes lol.............stan

K

Hi Stan.

Poetry is a lover's book of reference....love speaks. It warms my heart to hear your words of love for the woman you married. I'm not that lucky, but I'm fortunate. ;-) .

Much enjoyed this whole thread. Thank you.

~A

S

Thank you, but I can't promise no changes as I'm always tinkering with my stuff. Indeed, a one word change is what brought this poem back to top of stream lol.......stan

wesley snow

I liked this. Not that you needed my comment. You're loaded with fans here.
I still (of course) would have liked a more even meter, but the sum of the poem was comfortable and lovely.
wesley

S

I'm pleased you enjoyed this. I am not too well versed in technical aspects of poetry yet, so meter slips are probably rampant in most of my stuff. And that also begs the question : Which is more important the ease of read and message delivery, or maintaining strict meter? The masters manage both, but this neophyte only gets it right occassionaly lol...............stan

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 6 months ago

To see a rose with feelings
to look at the inside
where the feelings are held tightly
before age unfurls the bloom
Is a beauty that many need
Susan is blessed that you see her so.
This is True Love,
Yours Ian.T

S

Hard to believe this oldie was dug back up lol. Thanks for resurrecting it.................stan

Ian.T

They found a king under a car park in Leicester City a few weeks ago.
(Richard the Third).. I think they are now looking for his car but they don't know where to bury him.
My kingdom ended in a car park for the want of a horse of course LMAO
Keep Digging Y'All,
Love you all still, Yours Sparrow

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 6 months ago

Do you think this is now a memorable Poem lol, Take care and keep writing, Yours Ian.T