Eduardo Cruz
Eduardo Cruz
Aug 17, 2011

MY DANCING THOUGHTS

The Mediterranean pales at the beauty
Of the exquisite pleasure of seeing
Your undeniable features
Eyes, lips, and skin

Your dark hair shining
Like the moon reflecting
Upon the sea, which takes away
The breathe of those who see

The song that is your voice
Stops the heart
With flights of fancy
Creating pictures in a fevered mind

You are the dream of many
But few can hold
For you are a rare gem
That can’t be bought or sold

I gaze at you from a distance
And even that captures my very soul
I am lost with words that dance
In my head trying to explain.

This is just a dream
Made of thoughts that can never be
For I am just a humble slave
Of the beauty which I see.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I wrote this for a friend who is in love, but does not know how to approach the woman. I gave him this after he explained how he felt, then I wished him luck.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda

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Comments

Candlewitch

Although the whole poem is elloquently beautiful, these lines stood out:

I gaze at you from a distance
And even that captures my very soul
I am lost with words that dance
In my head trying to explain.

This is just a dream
Made of thoughts that can never be
For I am just a humble slave
Of the beauty which I see.

All I can say, is that you are one hell of a good friend!

always, Cat

Eduardo Cruz

he just told me how he felt (Jeri) and I wrote it down. Wow as I am writing you this something hit me.
I'm Cerrino the Burgerrac, is that crazy LMFAO!
thanks Cat your a friend also.
Eddie

S

I appreciate you writing a poem about me but line 5 should be "your bare pate shining" as I'm bald roflmao..Whoever did inspire this is a lucky woman............stan

loved

loved

13 years 8 months ago

Your dark hair shining
Like the moon reflecting
Upon the sea
which takes away
The breath....
of those many
who do you see
in the seasee

R

raj

13 years 8 months ago

you have a way with words to express the romance nicely expressed in this write...

amongst all good lines..i loved the end lines...

For I am just a humble slave
Of the beauty which I see.

Eduardo Cruz

I thank you for stopping by and readong.
glad you liked it.
Eddie