dhruv
dhruv
Aug 14, 2011

The Encore

(following http://new.neopoet.com/node/broadway-lovesick-puppies )

..you and me,
that’s all.

the stage is set-
for the second coming,
as I take center-stage
I am
illuminated,
by the spotlight
irradiated,
by the eyes.
imperceptible
in disguise.

the curtain’s lifting
the fog, settling
the lights, dimming.
the spotlight, shifting
to your face.

I act,
for in this act,
I get to touch your lips
with mine.

conceivably, at a point during this act,
my stunted heart started beating for you.
perhaps, gone unnoticed.
by the deafening roar of the crowd
applauding,
cheering,
enticing,
the phony development
of a pseudo-love
cloaking a true love.

(final part of the three poem set can be found here http://new.neopoet.com/node/denouement )

About This Poem

Last Few Words: this poem follows http://new.neopoet.com/node/broadway-lovesick-puppies part two of a three part set

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: IND

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Comments

Eduardo Cruz

this is good, you're capturing the moment perfectly in this act of poetry.
Bravo!!

Eddie