Fucked over from the start
brutally narcissistic, cruel
you went for the jugular
Knew where to cause the most pain
gasping, clawing
fighting breath
Inserted the blade
sliced and made the incision
penetrated the muscle
Probed and examined
dissected and bisected,
each part.
You thrust and skewered
wrenched me open
to examine.
Crooked little scar
jagged and worn,
ripped beneath my heart
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Oh, the cruelness...
of the Lady Love. She only cares for the moment. After she is done with you, you are abandoned, left with the scars of her manipulations. One little criticism. You spelled [tear] wrong. Great job! Love ya, ~ Gee
Gee
thank you
love lou
Dear Lou,
Love can be cruel and unrelenting, as you have proven here. Good one!
always, Cat
Cat
Thank you
much love Lou
Victim!
It was poetry like this that made me challenge you to write a joyous poem. And I've got to say you did it superbly. Frankly I am really bored with your "being hurt in love" poetry, as well written as it is.
There is a whole universe to deal with.
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check it out.
Love this youtube, have often
Love this youtube, have often posted it, though not recently enough to have forgotten it.
Lou, I love your fuck you I'll write what I write when the mood hits me, it's one that I have used
since I returned to writing poetry again after 30 year hiatus...kids, work, a bad marriage and lots and lots of reading... being int the marketplace...
I know a lot of our poetry is to excise the demons in us, and Neopoet offers a mix of every genre
of poetry, no matter what our favourite flavour is.
It's just that we care (yes I do!) and hate to see folks get *stuck* in their tried & true genres. There's more than one side to us to reveal itself to the poetic form......It seems to me, when we are *stuck* is when the muse decides to leave....for parts unknown...s/he is sick of fucking in the missionary position. ;-)
~A
~A
I understand
but i like to do things at my own pace, i don't mean to be rude, I just need to discover my own path, i am aware there are other subjects, just need to feel the inspiration.
Lou
This is the best I've heard
This is the best I've heard from anyone anywhere in a long time, Lou.
A bow of thank you.
~A
Frankly Jess
I don't write my poems with you in mind, therefore I write what I want to. I understand what you are trying to say, but I will write on other subjects if and when the mood takes me.
Lou
No, I don't have to read
but I care,
and cherish talent, like you have.
It's what I do.
So I often offer unwelcome suggestions.
Tell me to fuck off as often as you like.
I believe you are are a better poet than you give yourself credit for and am really only suggesting you extend your range of subject.
Jess
I understand totally, but as I said to Anna I need to find my own path, and write about other subjects, when I feel inspired. I love writing dark poems and that will never change, the same for what you call my victim poems. I will extend my range but if and when i feel i can, but as i said the dark side will always be part of my writing.
Lou
You know I'm still gonna have a go at you
now and then.
Ask a kid "Why do you ask so many qustions?'
The kid replies "I'm a kid, it's my job"
Same for poets, I reckon.
It's always good to be
It's always good to be reminded that this isn't the only side of that. lol.
~A