Devouring Shadows
Lights flick off,
Suddenly
Drowning the room
In complete,
Compelling darkness,
Devouring every shadow.
No window present
To mar the blackness
With soft shadow.
It begins...
the pounding heart
eyes wide with fear
they huddle in the gloom
some flat on their bellies
to avoid bullets going astray
Somewhere
Shrill siren screaming
Breaks the night
Into tiny
Fragmented pieces
Thin walls,
Echoing with gunshot,
Sounding out in the night,
As another gang member
Breathes his last
On the bitter, damp street.
yet there are those
with emotions so saturated
with this daily menu of mayhem
they feel only numbness
and relief at being alive.
Comments
Cat
Loved the title, language was used sparely but effectively. The lines were a little short, obviously that was intended, it caused the rhythm etc, to be a little sharp. I enjoyed the theme, as if you hadn't guessed already, I love a dark theme lol !!
Good job
Love Lou
Thanks Lou!
I always enjoy reading what you liked about my poems.
always, Cat)
My Honour
My Honour
It’s a signal honour,
ma'am
Whenever you visit my leaf,
It helps me turn,
A new leaf,
In my life!
HI!
Thank you Loved!
always, Cat)
Dear Lonnie,
Thank you for your gracious comment. Due to Ian's comment, which gave me food for thought, there will be a little more. I hope you like it when I'm finished.
always, Cat)
Dear Ian,
Thank you for your critique. It has caused me to examine this piece more closely for what I was trying to convey. I will do a rewrite and invite your examination.
always, Cat)