Leonard
Leonard
Jul 10, 2011

A Parrot's Portrait (Haiku)

bright downy feathers
aerodynamic form
freshly painted beak

written: 25/02/2008

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: IND

Favorite Poets: Apart from Walt Whitman

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raj

13 years 9 months ago

nicely done Leonard..i wish though you could replace the word body to give this more cadence...

Leonard

I agree with you . Perhaps - as Gee has suggested - I could use the word "form" instead of "body" but people are sticklers for the 5/7/5 form. Actually, if you check out Haiku writing on the internet, it is not really necessary to stock to the 5/7/5 formula. You could miss out a syllable her and there.

Thanks for the read. I have changed the word to "form".

Cheers ... Leonard

Janice Pearce

So glad to see an old friend here, enjoyed this haiku from you!

S

Enjoyed. Hats off as when I write Haiku I can't seem to stop at just one...............stan

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 9 months ago

that instead of [body], you could use [form]. This gave me a great picture of a parrot though! ~ Gee

Leonard

I agree and have done as you have suggested.

Leonard