Senyus / Haikus

Senyu

Hurdlers scurry treetops
Stowing wintertime supply
two squirrels gather nuts
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Haiku

Behind rain, lighting
Bright, reddish, stormy heavens
Awe an orange sun sets
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Haiku

Hung above snow clouds
Amidst rain, thunder, lighting
A rainbow paints skies
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Senyu

Birds glide south, to rest
From strain, of winter famine
Depart, vacant nest

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins

Comments

Barbara

a good haiku/senryu (i could never figure out the difference) which created the picture for me,,,nice and smooth...

Raj

Thanks ive been writing haiku for a while
I learn how to write and know the difference right here at neo
Never heard of either before neo

lovely!

Haiku/senryu don't have titles! they are the purist minimalism of poetry.

A couple of suggestions

Behind the rainstorm
Bright ruddy skies and dark clouds
the sun sets [eliminate the inessential to create an evocative ending]

Hung above snow clouds
Amidst rain, thunder, lighting
A rainbow paints westerns skies [sorry but horrible cliche, again, eliminate the inessential to create an evocative ending]
Western skies
or
oh, a rainbow

Just suggestions, I don't mean you to use my wording. In haiku less is always more.