signals of a pristine gommorah
About This Poem
Last Few Words: ********* * * * Im my family's religion there is a strict code about what is considered healthy and breaking that code is serious. My dad goes outside to talk with the smokers or walks a little bit longer by coffee houses simply because he likes the smells they have, to the people close to him they are concerned about it. Coffee and cigarettes arent the best for you I know that much but it goes a little further than that. Out here its extremely offensive to have either, same with tea, in a way its symbolic about what we reject even if it is what we truly connect with. Thats one small example of things he has avoided to be included. I am very odd with strange tastes and I know he is too. He never tastes so to speak. This is about harmful repression.
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Thanks for catching that
Thanks for catching that Seren. Nice to hear from you
I loved the visuals this gave
I loved the visuals this gave me, the quiet soft feeling of the poem, look forward to reading more of you.
Hi WhiteTea, I am also
Hi WhiteTea, I am also pleased to see your return.
I had a thought about the ending and then I reread your poem, this time with your commentary.
Would you consider:
rising through the ashes,
absent
without audience...
?