Candlewitch

Jun 23, 2011

This poem is part of the workshop:

Olympic Pool (initial workshop)

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Description:

Workshop for those who have graduated from the Splash Pool or are ready to take their poetry skills to the next level. This workshop should offer encouraging and more critical feedback from each other and the Moderators/Leaders. Main purpose of workshop is to help the attendees improve their own poetry skills and helping them to offer more detailed critique.

Chrys (China Blue) (Leader)
Enda (Ziggy) (Moderator)
Boni (Bonitaj) (Moderator)
Ian (Yenti) (Moderator)
Cat (candlewitch)(moderator)

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WORKSHOP - Critique Skills:

Workshop commences - 16 May 2011.

This workshop will cover the basic skills of critiquing. We will begin with a discussion of The importance of same.
Topics for discussion
Helpul VS a pat on the back
Why critque at all
Paying close attention to the Author's request(found at the end of each poem)
Questions and answers

All participants will abide by the workshop guidelines, including but not limited to
respect of each other, work submitted, and personal attacks.

Ten participants will be accepted on a first come first served basis. Submit your request to attend to my private message box China Blue

Requirements:

Each participant will bring one poem taken from the stream. This poem cannot be of someone they "always" critque".
Time will only allow a limited amount of poems to be crtiqued in the workshop. Therefore your workshop leader will select the poems from those submitted. Poems will be handled one at a time from beginning of critique to completion , then the next will be taken in order.

Process:
Participants must devote 14 days to the workshop
Those that have time limits on the use of the computers should contact me or Dan (Hooded Stranger) and we will try to work on an alternative solution.

* Each participant will submit along with the poem "Their" critque of the same

This will be critiqued by other participants, which will culminate in a complete critque which may be posted. Blatant errors will be corrected. We will be more concerned with the process of the critique

This workshop is closed.

All Hands To The Pump (Cliche Workshop)

All Hands To The Pump

You keep me on the down low
Telling me that it's all good
And all is fair in love and war
But it ain't nothing but a chicken wing
Because too many cooks spoil the broth
Of your nasty little acid test
Your love is blind to my needs
And your rolling stone gathers no moss
You're free as a bird as you roam
Like a seven year itch
Taking only the icing on the cake
You think that love is as scarce as hen's teeth
But you're hot to trot a mile a minute
Saying "I'm game"
You don't know that silence is golden
Because you're rotten to the core
You think I'm a necessary evil
As the lesser of two evils
When you could keep your nose to the grindstone
And hit that ball and knock it out of the park
Knock the cover off the ball
With you it is age before beauty
You Can't see that my love is
Fresh as a Summer's rain
And deeper than the deepest ocean

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This poem is for the cliches workshop.

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

A mutual admiration society

A mutual admiration society forms.

(Double check your caps.)

p.s. These workshops are SO MUCH FUN and gives us another chance to revisit one another, regardless of our original and/or changing impressions.

;-)

Anna,

Thanks for that, I also misspelled a word! LOL.

always, Cat

Thanks!

I know what you mean... it is cringe-worthy! LOL!

always, Cat

Bloody Hell

Cat,

Like Anna & Lou you made it look easy...I am most impressed. This has been a good exercise...and I doubt any of us will dare use a cliche again.

Dear Dan,

Thanks! I choked on my own words, LOL!

always. Cat

Cat

Great stuff you make cliches seem cool.

Lou

Thanks, Lou!

You won't find this poem in any book! LOL!

always, Cat

Cat

cliches used really wel

:)

Thanks, Barbara!

always, Cat

Dear (((Ian)))

You are so good at them. I think you must have a book of cliches on hand! Or else you could write one yourself!

always, Cat

Cat

Of all I have read, you'rs comes closest to being actually readable without that cringing "oh no you didn't" feeling.

Dear Jim,

Thanks for the encouragement! It's hard to write a poem that bad, LOL!

always, Cat

damn girl this is truly good!

LOL!

A really good bad poem? Is there such a thing or is it an oxymoron? LOL!

always, Cat

really good

the best i read so far as the flow is well done
and easy to read

!!!

Thanks so much, dear Barbara!

always, Cat

Ian

big mouth Rat, let us brown nose if it's what we do best.
Your statement shows that inreality you're the champ of brown noseing. Damn you do it good. Hahaha!

Eddie

Dearest Cat

from start to finish it is absolutely spot on as is expected of a pro...while i sit and absorb this learning experience....

much love..

Dear Raj,

You are far too kind.

love, Cat

Dear Cat

I am now eager to read your re-write...

much love...

Dearest Ian,

You are too much, LOL! You have made this workshop a lot of fun.

love, Cat

Thanks!

To everyone who read this and responded! Sorry I had to be gone for a bit due to an injury. I sprained my right wrist and was put into a brace. I'm right handed and trying to type with my left was a mess. So I adopted the hunt and peck method for a while,which got very tiresome and sore. I finally just stopped trying and nursed my wrist. I am back now, taking a break from the brace. I still won't be as active in neo poet as I had been. They say time wounds all heels...

always, Cat