raj
Jun 25, 2011

Silencing the Owls (Bugged by Workshop on Cliches)

Silence is golden
but this was a bizarre night
my mind was on a hot trot
thoughts running minute a mile

I wish I was at peace
not knocking the cover off the ball
by keeping my nose to the grindstone
with all hands to the pump aplomb

I was too blind to see
what the stars did fore tell
nothing but a chicken wing
was my forsaken fate

Luck as scarce as hen's teeth
despair deeper than the deepest ocean
hopes returning like a seven year itch
unmindful that Love is blind

Like too many cooks spoil the broth
silence was broken by rain drops, when
blades of green like icing on a cake
vanished like beauty before age

You'd zoomed into my life
as fresh as Summer's rain
being a free Bird,
I said I'm game

Love was short lived
you knocked it out of the park
reminding me
love was blind

Lesser of the two evils, was
when you bit the forbidden fruit
I knew not your love was
rotten to the core

"Silence is golden"
not for me tonight, when
I curse you in solitude
to silence the owls

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Dark poetry is not my forte, but had to go for it someday to silence the owls..:) I am not a participant of the workshop on cliches...this write is just to break my silence over the past few weeks..so bear with my attempt folks!!

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

R

i was waiting to make a fresh start after quite a while....i found this Cliche Curse as you said it challenging ...but didn't know it would be a dark one :) thanks for your visit and appreciation....

Barbara Writes

this is really good
almost made the cliche' worth reading lol

R

thanks for your time and visit ..nice to know you found this worth while....albeit on the darker side which is not my forte...

happy splashing to all those in the pool...

wishing you "minute a smiles"..how about that for a cliche :)

R

i guess rather than making my debut in the Olympic Pool it would be a good idea for an amateur like me to graduate step by step beginning with splash pool..i appreciate your invitation ..i will be humbled if you find me worthy of Olympic Pool...in which case how do i formally submit this write..you said in your comment "i can join with a re-write".. would that mean an edited version?...

thanks once again ....

Eduardo Cruz

it's good, Stop standing on the outside and PM Chrys to be in the workshop, we will be happy to have you, if not your just interfering in the workshop my friend so just join. you will have fun.

Eddie

R

i finally managed to make a come back overcoming the writer's block...Stan's suggestion helped in going back to reading my own work and i found this as Anna has quipped "cliche curse" quite tempting and challenging ..lol...

happy to know you found this good .i did send a PM to Chrys...encouragement from folks here is like tonic in my gin...Cheers!! :)

Eduardo Cruz

don't get to druck, because you still have to do a re-write, LMFAO!!

Eddie

R

thank you for the late ticket to be up on this band wagon...i hope i do justice with the re-write...

Eduardo Cruz

better late then druck lol

" if I'm druck and write a poem is that a cliche, or is it just crap"

LMFAO!!

Eddie

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lou

13 years 10 months ago

Good use of all the cliches, retains some originality.

Lou