t. reflexion
t. reflexion
Jun 20, 2011

A DISHONOURED WILL

Fair Jerome, dedicated his life
To the study of hidden knowledge
Made it clear to anyone who cared
Chastity would have been his stay
But for the duty to his wife who bore kids

Hardliner, he was, extreme sometimes
Wished for cremation so he made a will
His lifeless body be burnt upon transition
Embalmed not, nor kept in the morgue
With attendant expenses and troubles

He made no contacts, paid no dues for burial
Silence stole in before saying goodbye
Ten months in the mortuary, his remains waited
With family uncertain on what to do with his believe
The community decided, they must bury their son

His resolve discarded, on demerits and merits
Vigil at his residence marked the highpoint
For a long-road journey, not through the flames
But to be interred feet down below in his parish
According to accepted norms and tradition

About This Poem

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Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript

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Comments

t. reflexion

Thank you, I have done the corrections. I think it is better,Line 14, stanza 3, didn't quite capture my intention, so I have rephrased it for clarity. Actually, there is no law against the practice, just that people are not comfortable with it as it s strange to the land. Once again, I appreciate your help, best wishes.

tr

L

excellently written! Really enjoyed this tale! I think cremation should be compulsory(for the dead that is!)as burials are wasteful. Killjoy! No just being practical! Must stop rambling.......

Namaste,

Lenny

t. reflexion

but for my people, they are the ones to bury the dead, the family left behind may be treated as outcast and no one knows when death will come, like fair Jerome, unprepared. I will rather leave that to my children to do the best they can to bury their dead. Thanks for stopping by and your comments are appreciated. Best wishes

tr