faithmairee

Jun 16, 2011

we do not write about

we do not write about
what we do not know
the so-called visionaries
in a frantic world
savoring chances taken
mourning lost opportunities
advancing with unmatched passion
a mere reflection of our double-life

we do not write about
what we do not know
but of the esoteric
world inside our heads
of displaced bullets
or the bothersome sometimes
bull-headed black holes in our souls

we do not write about
what we do not know
but of pain and suffering
or pleasure (possibly pure ecstasy)
and sometimes someone listens
to the stirrings of our souls

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Lawrence Ferlinghetti

Comments

hi

A good look at motivation and inspiration...........stan

Many Thanks

I appreciate your wonderful remark. Thanks much.

Love,

Faith

hi

Disapointed, Kal? Not in the least. I answered an ad in a magazine "for writers who think they can!" They asked for poems about the writing life. I sat down and wrote this poem, then sent it out to them the very next day. The magazine is for teachers. Not only did they publish it but they paid me the highest amount of money they pay for a poem. So, there is no need to be dsappointed in anyone's response here. I was, in fact thrilled that xXena understood my poem from the get go.

Faith

There is an excellent message in this prose

There is much to be heard within this bit of prose; things that will stir a poet’s soul. We know what we know, but perhaps our vision differs from others in that we are able to paint images in words.

Personally, I like a more direct approach to verse, i.e.

we write about
what we know

“visionaries”
in a frantic world
savor risk
mourn lost opportunities
advance unmatched
through passion;
a mere reflection
of a double-life

But, these are only my thoughts. I think the title could be a bit stronger and the message a bit more visual for impact. I am not certain the repeated lines are strong enough to carry the verse and would consider revising them.

There is an excellent message in this prose but it needs more fire to really make those last lines hit home.

Thank you for the opportunity to absorb your words. ~Pamela

Hi Pamela

Thank you for taking the time to read and respond to my poem. Apparently, the magazine that published my poem found it presentable as they paid me well for it.

Love,

Faith

Congratulations

I would love to see it. What publication and when?

Thank You So Much

The magazine is called ByLine and they published my poem 16 years ago and paid me the highest amount they pay for a poem. Unfortunately, the magazine is not available on the newstand. You can find them on-line though.

Faith

Oh I will look then. Thank

Oh I will look then. Thank you and congratulations again.
It is always such a wonderful thing when a publication picks up a piece.

Happy Writing.

~Pamela

Interesting commentary

Interesting commentary inspired by your prose, Faithmariee, it's a good thing when a poem accomplishes that.

"A poet's work . . . to name the unnamable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world and stop it from going to sleep." ~ Salman Rushdie

Thanks Much

Hey, there-Thanks so much for the lovely response. I appreciate it.

Love,

Faith

Thank You Rosina

I'm thrilled that you liked this so much. The magazine I sent it to published it and paid me good money for it. Thank you for your supportiveness.

Love,

Faith

Awwwww Rosi

I'm honored by your wonderful remarks. I have such high regard for you both as a poet and a person. You just made my heart smile. Thank you, my friend.

Love ya,

Faith