Beautiful Spirit

You inspired from the start,
cradled me in the wealth of your knowledge.
Nursed this fledgling through it's poetic birth

A beautiful spirit that burns and sparks,
a vessel for all that is dark and exquisite,
and righteous.

Now you have been laid
and it is I who must support you.
Give you hope, enouragenent

I will ease your burden.
Erase your suffering,
allow you to be strong..

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

Comments

Chrys

Hi it's nice to hear from you again. I feel the poem's a little sloppy and over the top, but the words are heart felt.

Thank you.

Love Lou xx

soppy or not

(and i actualy don't think it is really - it needs a tidy up in parts, but one can see it comes from the heart)

just the last line spoils it a little
i think you need something stronger - sorry, no suggestions because this is yours and yours alone

lovely sentiment lou
love judy
xxxx

Soppy and sloppy

It's a little of both , Lol but then that's me haha I'm glad you liked it.

Much love Lou

he,he

freudian slip?
sorry lou - never soppy

lol
judy
xxxx

We want to know more about this person

The first two verses had me intrigued and I was
slightly saddened on the continuation as it could
have developed otherwise to contain 'more,' I am
not so sure what but there was something nice in
this that would be beautiful to follow.

"You inspired me from the start,
cradled me in the wealth of your knowledge.
Nursed me through my poetic birth

A beautiful spirit that burns and sparks,
a vessel for all that is dark and exquisite,
and righteous."

We want to know more about this person
and are disappointed when we don't.

I don't know but that's what I felt about it.
Love Ann