Sometimes you read
Of never ending love
Where couple lives
Happily ever after
The odds, submerged
Bitterness overlooked
Frustration and tears
Run down the face
This love sees, not blind
And knows what is right
Alert to ignore the wrong
When feelings overwhelm
Strength of love measured
In kilos by span and weight
Can carry the world, entire
Like Atlas, map on the globe
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
It is OK as long as you are there showing me the way, thanks and peace profound.
tr
I an T
I get the message, but your helper is staring at me, have I taken too much of your time? One again, thank you.
tr