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Jun 05, 2011

Walking Backward, Tripping Over Snakes

My love for you: As pure as lungs need air to breathe,
but that was not meant to be; your absence suffocates me.
I turn to follow prints of feet, crossing deserts to find Plan B;
all that's found are skulls and bones, it makes no sense to walk backwardly.
There is no resurrection of a love-dead-gone affection
when oxygen no longer longs for lips or passing through another's fingertips,
and that's exactly what I need in order to have the strength to run.
They say the body needs a lot of water; without it, there's dehydration.
I have thirst for love and second chance but how can a dancer dance
when his tongue is a raisin and stomach feels infested with ants?
And what is the meaning of an oasis, if the soul still needs its breath;
he could give me an ocean, but without you, there's only death.
All that's found are skulls and bones, it makes no sense to walk backwardly.
All that's found are skulls and bones, it makes no sense to walk
All that's found are skulls and bones, it makes no sense,
it makes no sense,
and this time, there's no resurrection.

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Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

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Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: All poets

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Comments

Ink Artist

this is a painfully honest piece. it has an excellent flow throughout and your internal rhyme is done with a deft touch. i have only one suggestion: L9 drop the "have" for "i thirst for love and second chance but how can a dancer dance." as i read this a few times, i omitted it personally. just a thought.

really potently emotive and genuine work. :)

~lori

Red Card

Thanks Lori. I was trying to convey that... I have thirst for love in the past. Is thirsted a word? Hmm.... even if it is, it doesn't sound right. I mean I get what you're saying and appreciate the input... but I think I might need "have" to express what I intended? :| Glad you like it though. :D