Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Jun 06, 2011

Soul Dancing

Soul Dancing

there are lingering
pages of you
I remember softly
morning
loving your eyes
looking through time
and back again
touching
that part of you
touching
me...
knowing
at that moment
in our time
what could never be
whole again
without you
lost in your gaze
unable
to look away
climbing after
mesmeric player
pipes the tune
spellbound soul
I follow
cresting...
keeping pace
with the woven magic
Rock teeth
bellow
cannot touch me
I am flighted!
I Believe

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

K

I think it is a beautiful poem all the way through, Cat.

I know that double spacing occurs when transferring from Word, and that is the only quibble I have.

~A

R

raj

13 years 10 months ago

this poem is all the more beautiful because of its cascading effect ..it flows so beautifully....

much love...

Race_9togo

I love this one Cat, its powerful and intimate and smooth as silk, except for the double spacing, and the quotes on the last line, which aren't needed, to me.
Really really good!

Candlewitch

I removed the quotes, as you suggested. I think it looks better now. Your suggestions and input are always welcome. Thank you!

always, Cat

Candlewitch

Soul dancing with my soul mate! The only kind of dancing I'll ever do anymore, lol!

love, Cat

Candlewitch

and for helping me out. When it comes to computers, I'm a real novice. I will try to figure it out before I come bothering you. You have been a great help, and I appreciate it greatly, dear friend.

love, Cat