Geezer
Geezer
May 13, 2011

What's Up?...

Realization of the weaker set
is part of the anatomy
Strength; reserved, is the proper thing
No match, no equal, has been observed

Certainly not this puny mind
nor the weak frame, needing support
Bones of steel, and cool blood
make for a champion

With ease, and a certain aplomb
the opening of doors, and holding them
leaves the impression of courtesy
"Control, is more like it"

Train them for dependence
Give them what they want
Keep a secret of their needs
It's all part of the plan...

About This Poem

Last Few Words: It took me quite awhile to figure out a title without giving away the theme of the poem. I want people to think/give, their own ideas about what this poem is about. Was I too obvious? Too obscure? Got a better title?

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 11 months ago

a huge Sci-Fi fan, does that give you a clue? Hee hee ~ Gee

K

My x & I (love at both sight for both of us) had a whirlwind summer love affair, by September I left my friends and family and home to move in with him. I'd wonder what happened to the man I fell in love with, and he'd say women are so dumb..it's part of the *charm*.. (yeah like a snake!)..the *conquest*.

He was always charming but then that was his *good* side. lol.

~A

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 11 months ago

to show the relationship between humankind, and robots. The masterplan of the robots, is to make themselves indispensible to us, doing everything for us... Clues: The weaker [set, not sex], and [Bones of steel, and cool blood]. I do see, however how it could be construed as being about the relationship between man and woman. Hee hee, ~ Gee

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 11 months ago

glad you enjoyed it, no matter the perspective. Yes, I used to be the man of steel too! What the hell happened? My batteries are low too, guess they need a recharge. Thanks for the read, and the compliments, ~ As always, ~ Gee

Candlewitch

I'm a dummy too! I thought it was about "love" between humans, too. I reread it to see it from the other point of view and that works for me too. This is different from many of your other style of writes and very enjoyable.

With ease, and a certain aplomb
the opening of doors, and holding them
leaves the impression of courtesy
"Control, is more like it"

love, Cat

Geezer

not a dummy! If you would notice, I did say that I didn't want to give away the true plot. It was meant to give the impression of either point of view. Maybe I should have given a couple of better clues, but I didn't want to influence the reader to either side. i'm glad that it caused the kind of discussion that it did. That was my intent. Love ya, ~ Gee

Xavier Sleuth

It kinda sounds like . . .
Sexism?
Again, idk.
Not too good at figuring out meanings for myself.

Geezer

It was that and more. ~ Geez.
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