sixteen isn't pretty
not the way magazines or
i imagined it to be
at her age i was mourning
black like crows
crowding palm trees-
she is too
we both wonder
how a hollow tree feels
when left to stand on its own
no leaf returns
it stretches
no shadows towards
welcoming sun
she writes it out
all the pain
all the parts
she isn't ready to say
my poetry is
like thinly veiled threats
constantly thrown
against my hope
i was once
like her
a furious red welt
swollen
and unready to
let it go
i watch her burn words
but she's not ready for
the finality release brings
it's ok to
still be
finding out
what a daughter means
i'll write her my words
until she finds her own voice
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She is not mine Ros, but the
She is not mine Ros, but the eldest daughter of the friend in California I am staying with, I do a lot of people watching :)
Chez
That the process we all going through, as our parents wait and hope we do find our own voice, sooner better than later.
Eddie C.
Dear CC,
Lines in this verse:
black like crows
crowding palm trees-
she is too
wouldn't Oak trees be better than palm trees. I've seen crows in oaks and other large trees but never in a palm tree. This image rubs me wrong.
But the rest of the poem I found to be creative and charming. A great write to a young girl growing fast. My favorite lines:
i was once
like her
a furious red welt
swollen
and unready to
let it go
always, Cat
If you are not familiar with
If you are not familiar with So California, the crows in Orange County fly in from the coastal area's each night and nest in the palm trees. So the image is a correct one here.
Chez
You are right about the crows in orange county, I just came back to NY after living there for two years. I am return in June to the valley.
Eddie I watch them from my
Eddie I watch them from my window where I am staying, they fascinate me the way they do that
Dear CC,
I wasn't aware of that fact! It sounds like an amazing thing to witness! Forgive my ignorance.
always, Cat
Crows
First, I will “crow” over you poem. I like it. Second, crow like the palms in the Carolinas, USA
Thanks Vex
They seem to be everywhere over here lol
Another,
Another beautiful poem, as we've come to expect from you. Regards Roscoe..
Thank you Roscoe, that's a lovely thing to say,
It's always inspiring to see a young girl like Katie beginning to blossom with all the drama that goes along with being a teenager :)
She is my friend in
She is my friend in California's daughter, she is growing up with all the angst that comes with it :) Thank you Shirl.
hello
We tend to forget how hard being a teen can be. Every place I thought to suggest a change would have lengthened the line. I think your minimalist style would not benefit from this , so I can only say great job..........stan
hello
oops! lol
Hey Gal
Katie..this is good and it is just appropriately written about a teen for a teen. Those memories for me go way back and thanks for bringing them to the headlines today.
Great job my friend and are you home now?
Talk soon
Love, Mona
Not home yet Mona, still sightseeing :)
Having a great time here in Cali, the weather is wonderful considering they are telling me back in Melbourne its about 35 so I am not in a hurry :P