Rett

Oct 29, 2010

Mother Nature's Child

Mother Nature’s Child

She rides cascading silver
Down frosty mountainsides
She breathes in golden sparkles
Upon her joyous rides
She lives upon forever
Lost in the soul of man
And dreams of silver horses
That chase across time's span

She can move the mountains
Dry water from the sea
Make a seed come to life
And grow a tall oak tree
She can make a grown man cry
With her woman's wiles
Never turn your back on her
She's Mother Nature's child

She weaves herself a tapestry
From the dark of space
And uses silver stardust
With which to paint her face
She lights her way with moonlight
As shadows start to fall
And paints a fiery sunset
Across the heavens for all

She always sets the fashion
Like the turning of the leaves
Ev'ry eye looks to her
And ev'ry eye says please
She can make men want her
With a wiggle and a smile
Never turn your back on her
She's Mother Nature's child

She gathers in the strings of time
To clasp against her breast
And weaves a glowing sunbeam
With which to belt her dress
She listens to the music
Of nature as it sings
And paints a golden sunrise
And dreams of other things

She gathers up the lightning
From the stormy skies
And you can hear the thunder
See the flashes in her eyes
She can be so gentle
Or she can be so wild
Never turn your back on her
She's Mother Nature's child

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Oldie, but felt it would be a good one to post since neo is back.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

About the Author

Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson

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Comments

Thank you Shirley

It is a bit of a weird one. If you read the first for lines of each stanza you will find it is a poem unto itself and if your read the last 4 lines of each stanza you will see it is also a poem unto itself. *L*

beautiful

Lovely , and as Shirley says, great imagery. A pleasure to read.

Lou

Thank you Rosina and Lou

I truly appreciate it. Very glad you both enjoyed it.

Oh magical nature's waterfall

Oh magical nature's waterfall
of silver tumbles down the page
and mesmerises, entertains and sends
our thoughts all dancing in imaginings
of beauty and such things that charm,
while the music of mother nature casts her spell.

She cast a spell on me too Rett, I loved
this poem, what a lovely way to start here,
if it is the first you have sent in, I have yet
to understand the mechanics of this new site.

Love to you and keep writing do.
Ann of N.

Thank you Ann

Yee, it is the first post by me. The mechanics take a little getting used to, but it is easy once you get it.

Click on Poem in the sidebar

Type or paste in your poem

Select type

check your review request intensity

Where it says select a value, select stream

Click on save or on preview for one last look at it, then save.

It should be posted.

Good to see you back my friend! Hope you are doing batter.
((hugs)) Rett

a beautiful journey you just took me on rett

exquisite imagery - i tried to pick favourites but discovered i was writing out the whole poem ....
well done on a great write

love judy
xxxx

Thanks Judy

I am very glad you liked it.

This is a beautifully

crafted poem Rett full of strong imagery. It flows extremely well although if I had a very small niggle it was with the line "across the heavens for all" which felt as if it had one syllable too many. May be it was just me but that verse accelerates towards the end and the final line made it slow and stutter slightly. Great stuff nevertheless. My best wishes Keith

Thanks Keith

I'll give some thoughts on how to best resolve that. I appreciate it!

Hi Rett, great to see you again!!!!

This one felt so vast at first, I was all set for a really exciting journey of imagery, then it changed tack & got a lot less wild & evocative, I wanted more of the wild imagery, less of the direct reference... just a taste thing... but I got a taste for it from your first couple of stanzas, where the theme was more ambiguous & the scenes more vast & wild... I suspect you could have several poems within this write as well... I love that you have made seperate poems from the 1st lines & last lines as you describe... Great to read you again... by the way, I enjoyed the entire poem, just wanted more of the original style that was set up initially, if I'd begun after those 2, I am certain I would only be full of praise... but you were never one that needed that so much I know, deserving as you may be.

ps I had to chuckle that you happened to turn up AFTER the elections!!!

Cheers
look forward to more.

Cloud

Caught! LOL

Loved the read,

I loved reading this stunning piece of poetry, Regards Roscoe...

Thanks Roscoe

I appreciate it.

Hey Cap,

I 've never read this one by you. it is almost like a mother's song to a child. your stanza are well constructed and the rythming in certain place carries so well.
I truly love this one it is definetly a classic one to bring back ev"ry now and again. A real reading pleasure!

Eddie
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