judyanne
judyanne
May 09, 2011

Who? (The Other Me)

Someone waits in Timelessness
dreaming The Path for me;
guiding me through the school of manifest
and the bedrock of eternity.

Someone is Being in authentic divinity.
I’m costumed in my stardust machine.
Together we dance in our own special feature
brought through to life through our own unique dream.

Who is dreaming the dream I am walking
in the ageless I of consciousness?
Who is directing the strokes of the brush
Which, little by little, paints my eternalness?

Once re-united with self-knowledge I lack,
all experience at my fingertips to take,
I’ll hear and see what wonders, I wonder,
when both the dreamed and the dreamer awake.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many

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Comments

mand

mand

13 years 11 months ago

Profound words from a very talented deep thinker. Incredibly thought provoking.

Good to read your work again.

Love Mand xxxxxx

Nordic cloud

I find I know the source of this thought-travel
into the known unknown;
and with it you intrigue the people who know not the unknown
as you do,
dreaming in your daytime
awake to write this piece of magic
to entertain our minds.

Dear judyanne so glad to see your poetry again,
love from me, annanya.

judyanne

i love people to get from the poem what pertains to them at their particular viewpoint of life.....
i really love that you related to this
as for my meaning - i think you sort of have it....i'm talking about my higher self and me....
love judy
xxxxx

R

raj

13 years 11 months ago

conscience is like a bedfellow
never leaves us alone for a while
each unseen act or even a thought
never escapes his might...

i enjoyed the write and the theme...

in fact i am working on a similar theme..not just ready with it as yet...

judyanne

lol
dependent on what you mean by a flair for drama.....
i couldn't be a prima donna if i tried i'm afraid
my yin and yang is not balanced
much too much of the observer
much too little of the participant...

thanks for the great comment
love judy

S

One dares not try to speed through this thought provoker...............stan

Race_9togo

It's good to see new writing from you.
This is very good, until the last stanza, where the cadence breaks down, for me. Particularly the 2nd line, where the cadence simply doesn't fit, imo. Up until then the flow is excellent, and the meaning and implications profound. I think you should re-work the last stanza, to fit the rest of the poem in pace and flow.

judyanne

thanks for that
about to remove 'possible'
- i think that fixes it ??
love judy

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 11 months ago

contact with our higher selves, as you say, should be everyone's goal. Unfortunately, that is not always the case. I found this extremely interesting, and thought provoking. Nice to see a new write from you. ~ Gee

A

Dearest Judy, my favourite lines are

Once re-united with self-knowledge I lack,
all experience at my fingertips to take,
I’ll hear and see what wonders, I wonder,
when both the dreamed and the dreamer awake.

These lines mean a lot to me...thanks a lot.
Regards
Ayaz

Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

wow, so many have commented already and I must agree, it is thought provoking and deep.
my favorite line:
I’m costumed in my stardust machine.
you have no idea how many images this evokes, this line is a true inspiration, a statement, a vision...
I simply adore the rhythm of the last two lines, the occasional staccato woven into a soft melody. beautiful and enticing.
your Proprietress

judyanne

you must've dug deep to find this one
thanks for looking :) it is really appreciated

and thanks for the great comments
- i especially like the line you pointed out too
love judy