scribbler
May 04, 2011

THE HUNTER

Patience born of time afield
Knowlege gained by long experience
Stealth learned from endless practice
      garbed in dark to hide in shadows

     Little escapes his steely yes
     as the hunter stalks his prey
 he picks.....and chooses
                              at his leisure
quarry often unsuspecting
      unaware of perhaps being passed over
      in favor of another mark
      whose end is
                         - sudden-

Matters not to the hunter
  is prey aware of his presence
                                       or not
                     same outcome
                 same loss
               same sudden lurch between living
                                                     
              and dead

The slow inexorable stalk
 the long stretches of silence
                                 and waiting
                                 and watching
                                 and deciding
            now    or        later?
                  this one or that one?

Swift cold blooded decisiveness
              with inevitable result

I am the quarry          Death the stalker
                                                      and eventual victor
                                                           but not today

 

                                                             

                                      

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Anybody know how to remove double spacing without deleting and rewriting?

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

Candlewitch

Good title. I like the presentation of this piece as it helps the flow. I was picturing a hunter with his trusty bird dog right beside him waiting for the rush of wings. I love the surprise ending!

Little escapes his steely eyes

as the hunter tracks his prey

He picks.........and chooses

at his leisure

Quarry, often unsuspecting

unaware of perhaps being passed over

in favor of another mark

whose end is

sudden

excellent writing! I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work.

always, cat

S

Trying to remain undetected by the ultimate hunter lol...............stan

mand

mand

13 years 12 months ago

Well it's all been said really. I too liked the surprise and positive ending.

Great Job.

Love Mand xxxxxx

S

I was just posting something from old site and hardly expected this much comment...................stan

S

Look who got a new picture ! Thanks for the typopo catch, I rerrrley mak misstakes like that ant mower lol..............stan