Eduardo Cruz
Eduardo Cruz
Apr 23, 2011

Haiku IV

"The contours of earth
Are the roads traveled in life
Searching for our place"

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda

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Comments

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years ago

Eddie

地球の輪郭
人生で旅行される道路です
我々の場所を捜します

I thought a Japanese translation would be helpful! Lol!

I liked this one better than the other three you posted - it had a much deeper meaning.

Perfect syllable counts.

Good job,

HS

Eduardo Cruz

Che-Che,
地球の輪郭
人生で旅行される
LMAO

thanks bro, it's appreciated!

S

multi-lingual show offs lmao. It Is better that last two...............stan

S

Mah multilinguahl expertise onlah exteynds ta Suthern aynd Anglish ya'll.............stan

Eduardo Cruz

Take your shoe off, y'all stays a spell. My lady is from New Orleans, Cajun at that. So now we're talking real American English.

Eduardo Cruz

"If I'm drunk a write a Haiku about the deeper meaning of life, does that make me Japanese?"

thanks Ian and yes we're letting the bottles fly, duck there's one going your way. hahaha!

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years ago

Ian,

the translation is not perfect!...It says:

An outline of the earth
It is a road traveled in
In the life I look for our place

but who cares, I was only trying show off anyway!!

There some sideway nines in there aren't there, good spot!!

Lol!

HS

Eduardo Cruz

That's terrible, that's what you get for showing off. lmao

CCfire

This one is deeper,I think the idea of haiku is to make a person see it more as a shortform for an aphorism, a deeper meaning than just the words and syllable. It's a specific art that Basho did so very well. Keep working on it. I do on mine occasionally I get the urge :P

white crane over tree's
smoke from house seen from above
wisdom smiles on them

Eduardo Cruz

once in a blue moon I work a little. Hahaha!
But this ain't one of them.
It's better thanks, I have a few more that I will post at a later date

R

raj

14 years ago

"The contours of earth
Are the roads traveled in life
Searching for our place"

i liked your Haiku and was inspired to come up with this one..

Under the awning
of a beautiful sky dome
we seek our abode

Eduardo Cruz

It's such a beautiful thing when a poem can inspire another poem that's so stunning. I hope you posted this one for everyone to enjoy!
Thanks for the generous comment.

M

I really like your Haiku's Ed. Hope you had a Happy Easter with family and friends

Mona
xox

Eduardo Cruz

Thanks sweetie, I appreciate your thought. I don't celebrate Easter or any other catholic holiday
Again thank you anyway you enjoy yours.
Thanks for the comment on the poem