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Japanese haiku don't have titles so it's irrelevant. I like the feel of lightness here, I assume you meant 'fall'
:)

spring hopes for sunshine
words from shady bowers sprung
a poem writes itself

:)

The purists would have it 17 but truly Basho who invented it actually says himself that the shape of the image and the words are more important and japanese syllables do not equate to english ones so I think it's a moot point. Amazingly though if a haiku comes to mind easily it almost always is 5 7 5 and I think that is Basho's point. A good haiku is just in a poet's mind where it lies in perfection no matter what the syllable count is. :)

The purists would have it 17 but truly Basho who invented it actually says himself that the shape of the image and the words are more important and japanese syllables do not equate to english ones so I think it's a moot point. Amazingly though if a haiku comes to mind easily it almost always is 5 7 5 and I think that is Basho's point. A good haiku is just in a poet's mind where it lies in perfection no matter what the syllable count is. :)

Tsk tsk the last thing a true poet does is conform to rules...who made them if not to be broken?

5 7 5 =17
now i have to learn
English syllables
till then abide
with me

Eddie,

a title for you:

ApologiesbutnotitleforthishaikupoemI'mafraid

a seventeen syllable title.

regards,

HS

Ed, I usually just title mine "Haiku" and have dome with it, unless its a collection of Haiku, in which case I'll give it a title.
Japanese Haiku and English Haiku are completely different. With japanese, not only the words and meanings but the structure of the piece, and often different levels of association and meaning of the characters themselves, lend extra layers of depth to the poem that is extremely hard to emulate in English.
But I love this Haiku of yours, it really works well.
As for the 5-7-5, I always use it, as I find it harder to put my words together with that restriction, and I'm always trying to stretch my own boundaries!

Good Haiku man, thanks for posting!

the purpose of all restricted form poetry is to challenge oneself by writing within rules. I have been lead to believe that true Haiku needs a nature theme, would be written in Japanese in 5-7-5 form then translated to English where syllable count would fall where it may. So who wants to join THAT bandwagon? lol. So to keep it simple just use the rule you like best but be consistent in using it or just label it Japanese and don't worry about it..........scribbler
I thought a Haiku
would only be true to form
if in Japanese