Geezer
Geezer
Apr 14, 2011

The Walking Man...

I see you walking all alone
So many places, I've seen you roam

Far uptown, and downtown too
Sometimes, I see you someplace new

I often think, I'll ask one day
What makes you walk all that way?

I wonder what your thoughts might be?
I've seen you look right at me

But, you just turn your head and walk
If I stopped, would you talk?

I think about your solititude
I'd interrupt, but it might be rude

What would you say, should I question?
What makes you walk, in this direction?

You walk with such a measured pace
Hands in pockets, serene of face

Whitened hair, brown of eye
Slender frame, head held high

You are familiar from afar
When I drive the streets in my car

I might just stop, one day to see
If I could have you talk with me

Maybe tomorrow...

About This Poem

Last Few Words: True story.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Geezer

on a slow afternoon.
If I should really see you there
I will wonder if I dare
To ask you just to talk with me
Then we might sit without the glass
To look upon the park's green grass
Thanks Ian, ~ Gee

Geezer

Is a word I should have put in there somewhere, because that's what he is...dignified. I imagine him to be maybe around 65 to 75 years old. He has white hair, beard and moustache, and he carries himself straight.
His pace is not hiurried, but it certainly eats up the miles. I am liable to see him miles away from where I saw him just a couple of hours ago. Thank you for the kind comments, I tried to keep it in the sense of my wondering where he goes, and why. ~ Gee

S

I have seen the type you describe so well in this gentle write. I have 2 suggestions you might think on :
L-7 I wonder what your thoughts might be
L-13 What would you say if I should question
....just a coupla alternatives.....................scribbler

Geezer

you have made a couple of good suggestions. I have implemented them both, and I think it does read smoother. Thanks Stan. ~ Gee

weirdelf

A frenzied passion for art is a canker that devours everything else.
Or

A sweetheart is a bottle of wine, a wife is a wine bottle.
Or

All which is beautiful and noble is the result of reason and calculation.
Or

Always be a poet, even in prose.
Or

An artist is an artist only because of his exquisite sense of beauty, a sense which shows him intoxicating pleasures, but which at the same time implies and contains an equally exquisite sense of all deformities and all disproportion.
Or

Any healthy man can go without food for two days - but not without poetry.
Or

Any man who does not accept the conditions of life sells his soul.
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Any newspaper, from the first line to the last, is nothing but a web of horrors, I cannot understand how an innocent hand can touch a newspaper without convulsing in disgust.
Or

Anybody, providing he knows how to be amusing, has the right to talk about himself.
Or

As a small child, I felt in my heart two contradictory feelings, the horror of life and the ecstasy of life.
Or

Beauty is the sole ambition, the exclusive goal of Taste.
Or

But a dandy can never be a vulgar man.
Or

Common sense tells us that the things of the earth exist only a little, and that true reality is only in dreams.
Or

Even if it were proven that God didn't exist, Religion would still be Saintly and Divine.
Or

Even in the centuries which appear to us to be the most monstrous and foolish, the immortal appetite for beauty has always found satisfaction.
Or

Everything considered, work is less boring than amusing oneself.
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Everything for me becomes allegory.
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Everything that is beautiful and noble is the product of reason and calculation.
Or

Evil is committed without effort, naturally, fatally; goodness is always the product of some art.

heehee, all said by Charles Baudelaire, the French poet, who coined the term "flaneur" as "a person who walks the city in order to experience it". Which could make an interesting alternative title "The Flaneur"

Just ask the bugger, the worst that can happen is he goes psycho and shoots you.

Geezer

or all of those thoughts in his head, he just might! Ha,ha,ha,...
Faith is an unreasonable assurance, that everything is as it should be. ~ Geezer

V

Thanks for sharing your curiosity. In fact, that might be part of a different title, not that you need one.
I get the picture of the man walking and that is how I usually judge the value of a poem, if I get the picture, it is a good poem.

Geezer

Vexations. I'm glad you get the picture. I try hard to give it. This guy reminds me of the old cartoon character, from the Grateful Dead videos. He has the smooth walk of him, that just eats up the miles. ~ Gee

Xavier Sleuth

You made me want to meet this dude.
Did you ever stop and talk to him?
Quite a character.
Thx for sharing.

Geezer

never did! I guess that it will have to remain one of the great, [well, not great...] but a mystery. I haven't seen him in a couple of years, so no telling what has happened to him. He may have moved away or found something else to do. I speculate every now and then, when I think about him. ~ Geez.
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Geezer

I would be interested to see what she writes about him, [if she does]. ~ Geez.
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Xavier Sleuth

Thal says there used to be an older fella like yours in her hometown
But she forgot about him.
Been 8 years.
She's pretty excited to get writing.
Wants me to thank you for the inspiration/reminder!!! (<--- that's her exclamation marks)
So thx.

Geezer

too glad to give Thal whatever inspiration/reminder she needs; [she writes really well] and I can return the favor that she did for me!
Sending you here was a good thing. I got my own private cheering section and and a new friend! Damn! I feel I owe her a lot!
~ Geez.
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