brittle light
brittle light
Nov 15, 2010

Regression

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I dream the caveman that dwells within
doth triumph over
my soft and genteel nature

dumb and dull
grunting and groaning my voice
stuffing slim pickings into a yawing mouth
over a pool of dirty droppings

with a dusty bed of gravel
to slumber
a lumbering, noisy sleep
belching, snoring
scratching, passing wind
dreaming of the hunt
for morsel and game
and the scent of a ripe woman
to soften the grueling hardship
only to reawaken
stiff and sore
to paw his way once more
into another day of eking

'tis only a dream, me thinks
and fervently hope
t'will not come 'round true

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

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Comments

Race_9togo

I had the disquieting feeling, as I read, that it was not a dream, but rather the reality of one stuck in the rut of living, who dreams it because he cannot face the truth.

Should "droping" be "dropping"?

Geezer

Geezer

14 years 5 months ago

a lot! " I dream that the caveman that dwelleth within doth triumph over my soft and genteel nature". My favorite line! I hate to nitpick, but gravel doesn't come in slabs, maybe you could use another word, like bed?
And dwelleth seems a little cumbersome, maybe just dwells? ~ Gee