lou
lou
Apr 05, 2011

Burn

Terror burns like a raging fire
searing the soul,
melting all self control.

It singes and
peels back the layers,
desiccating the spirit.

Cauterize the infection,
liberate my mind.
Set me on the path to redemption.

Incarcerate and tame the devil within.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I'm not sure about the last line, i might add another stanza.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

M

This is what I call a purge poem :) and it is good how one feels to express what it is inside or outside of one self. You did a good job at this and I like the line Set me on the path to redemption...good thinking makes good writing

Love
Mona

lou

lou

14 years ago

Thank you very much.

love lou

Candlewitch

Terror burns like a raging fire
searing the soul,
melting all self control.

It singes and
peels back the layers,
desiccating the spirit.

Great descriptions! You really gave this one your all. No suggestions and I love the title!

love, Cat

Z

I am liking this one a lot with lines like these
"Terror burns like a raging fire
searing the soul,
melting all self control. ,,,,,,,
and this "Cauterize the infection,
liberate my mind.
Set me on the path to redemption.

very good in my humble opinion
if you feel there is more in this go
for it ,,,,,,,,,,,,,well done ,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

lou

Thank you I'm really happy you like it

Come and have a chat please

Love louise