hobo
hobo
Apr 03, 2011

I Love Your Face

I love your face

When you smile
I feel life in my bones

When you gaze into the night
I wonder about the universe

How big it is
How small we are

When a tear runs down your cheek
My heart aches a deep ache

When I touch your satin skin with my finger tips
All of my worries melt away

I love your face

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: USA

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Comments

M

Lover of words and portraits..You hobo where you been lately. I watched the utube and liked it but I like you better a master writer of words and feelings to parchment here.

Welcome back
Blessings friend
Mona Mia

hobo

Mona Mia it is so good to be back. I have been gone forever it seems. thank you for your very kind words they mean everything to me

V

so captivating and you paint the picture well. Just a couple of nitpicks, one, I would drop the second line (doesn’t really add and to general, two, find other words for it in the last two verses. Perhaps you might use “your cheek” and “your skin” or satin skin, although I am not a fan of adjectives. Some lucky female will be happy to read this I am sure.

hobo

Thank you my friend, from the heart is always a good place to come from. I am glad you like it

hobo

lol my friend, I am not pulling your leg. I am in love and am always looking to fall in love hahaha. I think everyone should be this way. love is a wonderful thing. I am glad you like this

Thanks
Randy

lou

lou

14 years ago

So glad that you are back to bring some much needed romance into our lives.

Love Lou

introvert

You always make me fall inlove with your work and once again you have done it.....simple, straight forward but still good.