lou

Mar 29, 2011

Stampede

Give thanks for the courage
to be who you are,
Feel unashamed of your emotions.
Niceness is not a dirty word.

Gain strength from your vulnerabilities,
fuck those who don’t value and are
blind to your worth.

Learn from your mistakes,
If you allow yourself to be trodden on ,
Then make way for the oncoming stampede.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

Hooded Stranger

Lou

Lou,

can't believe you've not had any comments on this one yet!

Second stanza - brilliant...and possibly ouch!

Last stanza, I think you need to make a slight change:

Learn from your mistakes,
If you allow yourself to be trodden on,
THEN make way for the ONCOMING stampede.

Just a thought.

regards,

HS

Dan

Dan,

thank you, I'm really glad you like this one.

Second stanza , ouch !!!! Lol

I think you are correct about the last line , I will change it.

Lou

Z

hi there

Louise, a strong message in this write
"Gain strength from your vulnerabilities,
fuck those who don’t value and are
blind to your worth.",,,,,,zigs

Zigs

Pleased that you like it.

Thanks Bud

Love Louise xx

very nice

very nice, I love the last paragraph

Hi

thanks

lou

Jayne

Thanks i'm glad that you enjoyed it.

much love lou xx

Xena

thanks

lou