I reside within a room, book
in hands eyes consumed
on the pages between the
lines forming pictures from
words entwined.
without interruption
I read it through impressions
of an author I never knew.
thought brought to a place
where it is witnessed by
the here and now, open to
endless possibility's
which are disciplined only by
the limitations set out by
ourselves and others around us.
like thought echoed by
predeceasing generations
for us in fact and rhyme
written and bound
sealed in time.
Comments
hi ros
hey there hi, what can i say but thank you for a great comment
inspiration comes to us all in different ways cheers ,,,,,,,,,zigs x
hi
hi there wow my write reminded you of this
cheers jayne , infact im glad you posted it
thank you ,,,,,,,zigs
hi ziggs
howz it going
gr888888
not seen uuuuuuuuuu
of late
hi
hi there glad you dropped by
,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Yeah Zigs
A good book, timeless, duration-stopping, and eternally good.
Nothing to critique, just excellent poetry.
Enda
Great poem, but the third stanza could do with a tweak, maybe the first line could start with brought and line five could start with disciplined. I feel it will read better this way.
I really enjoyed the poem.
Lou
hi
hi lou i hear what your saying
but i'd prefer to leave it as is
glad you read this one ,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Zigs
Zigs,
apologies for missing this little gem, I didn't realise it had been posted.
Obviously I have had the luxury of reading this before in it's first draft...and I am pleased to see you haven't changed a word of that draft (or have I missed it?)
This is your image packed poetry style to a tee.
Obviously the book you are reading is 'Nine'...lol!
Loved this stanza:
thought brought to a place
where it is witnessed by
the here and now, open to
endless possibility's
which are disciplined only
by the limitations set out by
ourselves and others around us.
Good job, great write and one of your best!
HS
hi hood
hello yes you are normally the first to read my babbling mind lol
" image packed poetry " I like that indeed cheers man , but i already
knew your thoughts on this which might be why I never told ya it was posted lol
but I am afraid the book I am reading at the moment is THE BOOK of STYX "
which cat so very kindly sent to me, but yes I have read your "nine " story
hood and it is action packed with sublime detail ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Zigs
Zigs,
Nine will always come second place against the mighty Styx...I am happy to be second placed.
Styx is bloody marvellous ain't it?...which is why I used a poem from Cat's book to add into Nine.
regards,
HS
Dearest Ziggy,
A great write, all the verses are top quality, but the one that lingers is this:
like thought echoed by
predeceasing generations
for us in fact and rhyme
written and bound
sealed in time.
love, cat
hi cat
thank you so much for the read and comment
cheers hope your feeling ok ,,,,,,,,,zigs
Hey Zigs,
Hey Zigs,
I could have sworn i pushed send a few days ago, apparently not. Anywho, I love the room in which your head wrapped itself around your thoughts and birthed your words. :-) JC was right in quoting a Neruda poem... who always adds other dimensions.
A couple of thoughts/spelling questions
thought brought to a place
where it is witnessed by
the here and now, open to
endless possibilities*
(which are)** disciplined only
by the limitations set out by
ourselves and others around us
*Plural no?
**Omit *which are* ???
~Anna
p.s. Barry said hi. Though these are my thoughts only.
hi there
yes I see what your saying and it makes sense
i will edit , here's wishing you and barry a very
merry/happy xmas ,,,,,,zigs
Zigs
Zigs,
I noticed this one had received some more comments and since I love this piece I thought I would re-visit it to read the comments and the poem one more time.
It is still awesome!
Have a great Xmas,
HS
hi hood
cheers my good man
i hope you oliver and family have
a great xmas ,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Zigs
Zigs,
don't get to see Oliver until Boxing day unfortunately. Then I have him for two days of mayhem and excitement...I can't wait.
When will you see yours?
HS
hi hood
ah enjoy your time with Oliver, they grow up quick lol,
I saw mine xmas eve gave them the presents, they always
get to much from my family lol chat soon my friend ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,enda
Hey Ziggy
I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. I can see myself in this poem. I do a lot of reading, novel, poetry,
short stories, etc. I can see the picture you are drawing with words. It is oh so real. I thank you for
writings. You have a great talent in writing. Keep on writing my friend. Read you later.
Friends,
Pixee
hey there
glad you dropped by
and glad you enjoyed this one cheers for the thumbs up ,,,,,,,zigs