raj
Mar 20, 2011

Solitude

Silence, you are so profound
You surround me in a void
where the only sounds I hear
are of yester years
now rising from their grave
with shrouds

I am haunted by those sounds
in the silence of my dorms
which have neither doors
nor windows

Their echoes now dance
in the cockles of my heart
till they take a bow
through my eyes..

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

S

Indeed so often in times of silent solitude we all replay the past and are too often haunted by our mistakes. I enjoyed this and have but 1 suggestion :which have neither doors might sound better..............stan

R

thank you for the read and your comment which is spot on in the context of the theme of his write...thanks too for your suggestion which i will get done iommediately...

good to see your name on the Ballot...

warmly...

mand

mand

14 years 1 month ago

Yester year's memories. "rising from their grave with shrouds", thoughts/memories that echo around our minds and then they are gone until the next time. This is a very relatable poem.

Thanks for sharing Raj

Love Mand xxxxxx

mand

mand

14 years 1 month ago

Yester year's memories. "rising from their grave with shrouds", thoughts/memories that echo around our minds and then they are gone until the next time. This is a very relatable poem.

Thanks for sharing Raj

Love Mand xxxxxx

R

thanks for the read and appreciating the essence of the poem through your comment..good to see you after a while...

much love..

Z

ziggy

14 years 1 month ago

now this i like a lot

"Silence, you are so profound
You surround me in a void
where the only sounds I hear
are of yester years
now rising from their grave
with shrouds" and also like
this "I am hounded by those sounds
in the silence of my dorms", especially your use of ' dorms'
good write really like the way this sounds ,,,,,,,zigs

R

so rare for you to visit my page ,,,thank you for the read and your appreciative comment...good to know you enjoyed the use of the word "dorms"... i used it in the context of multiple deep seated memories in the mind space...

R

thanks for the read and your comment..it is indeed about being haunted by deep seated memories which surface during soltude...

much love..

Roscoe Lane

Great to read and absorb, nice poem. Well written Regards Roscoe..

R

its quite unusual to get your comment..perhaps it is because you found this write to be worthy of your comment....thank you for the read...good to know you found it absorbing..

warm regards...

Pixee

Pixee

14 years 1 month ago

A great read. I enjoyed it very much. It is well puzzled together. A 5 star if we had stars. Great job!

Cheers,

Pixee

R

thank you for the read...good to know you felt touched by the write...

good to see your name on the ballot....

much love..