Watching Us Grow( A re-write of Ever Near)

I like this little poem of sentiment, it has an honest charm that is refreshingly direct.

Just a few thoughts came into my head as I read.-

"We saw them through
You and I
In my eyes your quite a guy"

Wasn't so fond of you're quite a guy, in this otherwise interesting poem.

"There is still more years
For us to live through"

There ARE still more years....
There IS one
there ARE a number. But then this meaning is changing out of use
and laziness and soon, even now, may be the norm so do excuse
me if I am out of time and place?

"Of life, love and respect
Although you know
I’m less than perfect"

The respect and perfect I find are slightly forced.
Using the same words it might be otherwise formulated?

Nice thoughts here Chrys, love from Ann of Norway.

What a deeply felt write. I have a few alternative you could consider :
L-1 change had to have.......using had makes it seem this time is over
L-8 change had to have for same reason
L-11 begin line with just
L-12 split into 2 lines. Something like
in my partial eyes
you are quite a guy
L-14 change of to on
L-17 try the year just passed
L-19 try let's hope there are more
L-22 change could to can
l-50 tell stan to leave your poem alone........................scribbler

Minus some punctuation to break the flow of the read I think this speaks for itself and very well of thought and heart.

Good job Chrys
Mona

hi these are my fav lines "

Paths that had been
Blown by winds
Kissed by snow
And washed clean by rain
We traveled together as one "

maybe a wee bit of punctuation would help the flow
nice sentiments ,,,,,,,,,zigs
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I like this one, and apart from the use of the word "love" (heehee I'm kidding, I'm kidding!) I can find no fault.
I was upset to hear that you were involved in a car accident, and vastly relieved to find that you and Lonnie are all right.