Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Mar 13, 2011

STEALING GLIMPSES

Stealing glimpses
into another's soul
Shutters are drawn
nothing is manifold

But from each crack
a light creeps through
revealing so much pain
it's best not to peep,
or attempt to view...

Bj
13 March '11

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down

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Comments

Licia Daniels

The strongest of masks can be cracked if we'd care enough to look. Best not look too intently. Pain is contagious.

Smooth and polished write.

Diana

Race_9togo

I haven't seen you in a while, I hope everything's good with you.
While I'm not sure that I agree with your sentiment here - how else does one ease another's pain, but to accept and understand it - I cannot fault your poetry. Meter and word-use are nearly impeccable, and you make your point smoothly and succinctly, with power.
I want more too, please!
Most excellent.

M

I read this and then I read it again and then I read it a third time and was about to let it go and said no.. let me tell her

I had a problem in the syllable count maybe in this part or something did not jive with me right here. I shall revisit if I can think of something on it more tomorrow ..it is just my take..

stealing glimpses
into another's soul
Shutters are drawn
nothing is manifold (this line ..something about this line.. I believe the word I am stumped on is probably the word manifold and soul... in the ryhme)

just my wee stumblee, the rest of it was good. Food for thought..

Mona
xox

Bonitaj

This was just a slip of a poem to comment on the insights of a psychologist's daily life! moi!
Cheers