We are the same
When I bleed,
When you bleed,
The colour does not change,
We are all the same,
We love,hurt and feel ...the same.
Let's remember that
We are the same
When I bleed,
When you bleed,
The colour does not change,
We are all the same,
We love,hurt and feel ...the same.
Let's remember that
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem effectively conveys a message of unity and shared humanity. The repetition of "We are the same" emphasizes the universal experience of pain and emotions. The simplicity of the language used adds to the impact of the message. However, consider exploring more vivid imagery or metaphors to enhance the emotional depth of the poem. Additionally, expanding on the idea of "3world problems" in the title could provide more context and depth to the overall theme.
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kowque
WORDS OF WISDOM THAT I HAVE NEVER FORGOTTEN! I'M GLAD YOU WROTE THIS, BUT ESPECIALLY THAT YOU ARE STILL WRITING!
kowque
WORDS OF WISDOM THAT I HAVE NEVER FORGOTTEN! I'M GLAD YOU WROTE THIS, BUT ESPECIALLY THAT YOU ARE STILL WRITING!
Thank you
Hi Koki...
I think that I understand the connection of the title with the theme.
You are saying that no matter the wealth or lack of, all of us, we bleed the same, have the same emotions
and we should remember that. Nicely done, I would think of another title. ~ Geez.
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I'll gladly accept a suggestion
How about...
Under the Skin. ?
~ Geez.
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I'll gladly accept a suggestion