I found a letter on the ground,
most precious note I ever found.
And when I read its lovely theme,
no other lovely thought could seem
to touch the world as this fine note
which finely penned what someone wrote
to his lost love, his one and only
soulmate, alone, lost and lonely.
Two lovers, separate and denied
a lovers' love, husband and bride
who claimed to pledge til death do part,
yet, no claim prospered, no pledge of heart
came to be, on way to church and steeple
in front of church and church bound people
she lost her life, a tragic moment,
a lifeless, tragic, denied bestowment.
And when the crowds had disappeared
as crowds do when stunned crowds are cleared,
there lay this letter from one, now broken -
his letter, his heart, his vows unspoken.
Comments
Oh my...
How beautiful... this was a lovely read! Well done!
Hello, Kristen,
Thank you for your very kind words!
L
Yes...
it rolls off the tongue easily and the story is romantic, yet tragic. ~ Geez.
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Hello, Geezer,
I recall a true story similar to this in the past - a bride (or perhaps it was the groom?) tragically dying on her way to her own wedding. Not sure why it came to mind, but it surfaced in a poem.
Thank you for reading!
L
Hello dear Lavender
A poignant writing that captures the a lost love and the enduring power of the unspoken vows.
As a suggestion, I thought you might like to capitalize the beginning of each line .
I also find the repition of the word lovely a bit unnecessary. May be replacing one with heartfelt?
Just suggestion as you know that you are absolutely free to take or leave.
I have already enjoyed it
Hello, Rula,
I tried to use a word or two from the first line in each couplet also in the second line. It may be a bit too much, though. I will think over your wonderful suggestions!
Thank you so much!
Lx
L
Very sad and very well written. Lovely in it's misery. I enjoyed this as usual!
Hello, Leslie,
Not certain where this one came from, but it surfaced, just the same.
Thank you for reading and commenting!
L
Excellent poem, really
Excellent poem, really reflecting lost love, tragic circumstances that too often exist
Loved your poem
Excellent poem, really
Excellent poem, really reflecting lost love, tragic circumstances that too often exist
Loved your poem
Hello, Clentin,
It seems I've read of this scenario several times - possibly that is where the idea came from. It sort of spread itself out in the shape of this poem.
Thank you for reading! I appreciate your time!
L