I'm learning how
To unlove you
It hurts worse than loving you,
Knowing you don't love me back.
Jun 17, 2024
To Unlove You...
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem effectively conveys the emotional struggle of trying to let go of a one-sided love. The contrast between the pain of unloving someone and the realization that they do not reciprocate the feeling is poignant. Consider expanding on the specific emotions or memories that make unloving difficult, to deepen the reader's connection to the experience. Additionally, exploring different poetic devices such as metaphors or imagery could enhance the impact of the poem.
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Damn...
I do believe that we all have at least one of those kinds of love! I had a couple of them, [at least what I thought was love],
You don't think that you will ever get over it, but you do. You may not forget it, but you do manage to get past it. I saw that here. You brought the scene right into the open, and let it air out. Four lines, just hanging there, unanswered. ~ Geez.
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Thank you, Geezer
for your feedback. I truly feel this one in my heart and soul. It took a part of my heart when it found it's way to my notebook, the ink smeared from the tears that fell. I didn't have the heart to write any more than those four, simple lines.
To Unlove You
Hello, Kristen,
I agree with Geezer. We all have felt this stinging pain. You have described the heartache really well. I'm wondering if the last line is necessary. Without it, the depth and focus remains on the narrator. Just a thought.
Thank you!
L
Hmmm...
I hadn't considered the necessity of the last line. Truth be told I needed this one as raw as I could get it. I left it unedited. I may come back to this and revise it when it doesn't hurt so badly to reread. Thanks for your feedback, Lavender!
Hello, Kristen,
You are most welcome. Yes, this is very raw. I hope you heal and feel peace soon.
Lx
All of this
Unloving someone is so much more difficult than loving them. I think the worst heartbreak i ever felt was knowing I was in love with them but they only pretended to love me back. This tore at my heart. You are strong and will rise above and move forward over time. Hugs!
RoseBlack,
It is truly the worst feeling... I never knew how hard it could be. Falling out of love with someone naturally is one thing. While still painful, it's gradual. Making yourself fall out of love with someone for the sake of your own heart... it's impossible.