Clentin
May 03, 2024
This poem is part of the contest:

05/24 Romance

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Romance

Romance
Seeking someone
Expressing emotion
Feeling excitement face to face
Intrigue

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: USA Pennsylvania, USA

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, titled "Romance", is a concise piece that attempts to capture the essence of romantic pursuit. The brevity of the poem, while making it accessible, also leaves room for further development and depth.

In terms of structure, the poem is a cinquain, a five-line poem that does not necessarily have to rhyme. This structure is well-executed, with each line adding a new layer to the concept of romance. However, the poem could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery. For instance, instead of the general term "seeking someone", the poet could use more specific language to convey the kind of person or relationship they are seeking.

The poem's language is simple and straightforward, which can be effective in certain contexts. However, in this case, it might benefit from more nuanced and evocative language. For example, instead of "feeling excitement face to face", the poet could explore more specific emotions or physical sensations associated with romantic excitement.

The theme of romance is a universal one, and the poem does a good job of presenting it in a concise manner. However, the poem could delve deeper into the complexities and nuances of romance to create a more compelling narrative. For example, it could explore the challenges, joys, or uncertainties that often accompany romantic pursuits.

In conclusion, while the poem's structure and theme are well-chosen, it could benefit from more specific imagery, nuanced language, and a deeper exploration of its theme.

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Mary Beth Magee

…as well as in content. One of the charms of poetry is its ability to distill an idea to its essence. You have captured the essence of the pursuit of romance. Well done.

C

Thank you. I will visit it after I let it be for a while.
Thank you for reading and comments, well appreciated

Geezer

Geezer

11 months 3 weeks ago

The contest is: Write a love poem without using the word love. ~ Geez.
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