Kristen H.
Apr 21, 2024
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoet Weekly Contest 04/21/24 to 04/27/24

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Blackberry Winter

It’s the end of April…
Spring awakens after it’s long winter rest
The sun glistens between the fresh leaves on the trees
The birds sing once more
And the days last longer

Blackberry Winter stops by for a visit
Reviving the barren bushes
As the berries begin to blossom,
I am reminded…
Just as the weather and plants change
With every new season,
I must do the same.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: USA - Georgia, USA

Favorite Poets: Lord Alfred Tennyson

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neopoet

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively captures the transition from winter to spring, using vivid imagery of nature awakening. The metaphor of Blackberry Winter as a visitor reviving the bushes is particularly evocative. The theme of change and adaptation with the seasons is clear and well-developed throughout the poem. Consider exploring more sensory details to enhance the imagery further and create a stronger emotional impact on the reader. Additionally, you may want to experiment with varying the rhythm and structure of your lines to add more depth and complexity to your poem.

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Mary Beth Magee

I enjoyed your verse and the parallel between nature and lives. My only complaint is I wanted more! You pulled me in with your story and I didn’t want to leave so soon.
Thanks for sharing!

Mark

That last line is a great one Kirsten.
Thanks,
Mark

Geezer

the monochromatic scene put together here. It gives the feeling of "not yet Spring". I would have preferred to have had another stanza or two in this one, just to cement the relationship between you as a person, and the seasons.
~ Geezer.
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K

Very much, Geezer! I wrote this one with my head in the clouds and submitted it for feedback and I appreciate yours! I will continue this poem as it comes to me. Can't rush art and all that. Thank you!

Lavender

Hello, Kristen,
Such a poetic, alluring title. I love the brevity and think you've conveyed the message wonderfully, but I agree that I want more, especially from such a beautiful title. Blackberry Winter - sounds like a lovely, old soul.
Thank you!
L