03/24 Looking At The Stars

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Cosmic ships

Somewhere there, beyond the edge of the world,
Magical ships sail into the distance, unfurled.
In the corners of the universe they sail not
With galactic foam, they cleanse both day, so vast.

Somewhere there, in far-reaching expanse,
Where mysterious whispers dance,
Where stars twinkle and planets soar,
And cosmic maps require a treasure trove, more.

There, dwell forgotten fairy tales,
Unfamiliar with warmth or gentle trails.
Gray-haired heroes reside,
Forgotten trolls hide,
And the colors of dragons have grown pale.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Odessa,Ukraine, UKR

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I think this is our first meet so hello
Like your entry and thought it has a very good potential.
Love the imagery especially when it comes to the closing lines as imagination shows well.
Rhyme and rhythm also works hand in hand to make this a competitive piece

Well done!