tyro
Apr 01, 2024

Sweet Visitation

Do you come again!
Sweet visitation,
Do you come again!

Do you swell my heart
And lift my mind,
Do you come again?

Often have I waited,
And in the waiting
I was always low.

But now the hot tear
Rolls from my eye,
kisses down my cheek.

How I am overjoyed!
Simply you are here!

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: The Nederlands

Favorite Poets: William Butler Yates

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Comments

neopoet

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively conveys a sense of longing and anticipation for a cherished visitor. The repetition of "Do you come again!" creates a strong emotional impact and emphasizes the speaker's eagerness. The imagery of the tear rolling down the cheek adds a poignant touch to the poem.

One suggestion for improvement would be to explore more varied language and imagery to enhance the depth of emotion conveyed in the poem. Additionally, consider experimenting with different line structures or stanza lengths to create a more dynamic flow. Overall, this poem captures a sense of yearning and joy effectively.

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Lavender

Hello, Tyro,
Sounds like a lovely, lovely moment! Enlightenment! Whether in someone's physical presence, or deep within our soulful selves. Its presence is seldom, but emotionally overwhelming!
Thank you!'
L

Candlewitch

I love the shyness of the invitation. I find it peaceful and non aggressive in its implementation. a very nice poem. it is very nice to meet you, again!

*hugs, Cat

T

Hi Candlewitch,
Nice to meet you again as well. Just looking to see if I start again.

Leslie

When I think of the word visitation it always remjnds me of angels and such. Whatever visitation you are speaking of it must have meant alot. I enjoyed readig this.