A Long Way

She couldn't have been farther away.
Even though we were sleeping
here, next to each other.

Slow on the draw, to be sure,
it just took me some time
to get better at recognizing
what empty looked like.

And I understand now
just how far away far away can be
when it’s there in front of you.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski

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A Long Way

Hello, Michael,
So many relationships are in "limbo." I recall not realizing what a positive, good relationship was until I was fortunate enough to have one. Like your poem suggests, it just took me awhile to acknowledge the emptiness.
Thank you,
L

Exactly L! Thanks for

Exactly L! Thanks for stopping by!

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Dear Michael,

this was my first marriage...the emptiness was gargantuan! I like your poem, it brought back echos....

*hug, Cat

I like your comment about

I like your comment about "echoes." Thank you, and a poetry prompt for me...

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Hello Michael.

A well written poem that strike way to close to home. Ah, what might have been if I could have seen the forest for the trees.

Thanks for sharing. - Will

So true Will. Thanks for

So true Will. Thanks for sharing your comments on this piece.

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