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Her Way of Flying

If she could, she’d help butterflies
arrange the powder on their wings
just so, and they would thank her

with brightly colored performances in the air.
She envies the exhilaration the young ones must feel
the first time they alight after their first flight.

She wears a colorful dress trimmed with lace.
The butterflies accept this effort to be like them.
And they’re okay with her inability to fly with them
because they know she does this in her own way.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski

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Comments

Deaar Michael,

With a great title you launch this piece, it flows beautifully with your language usage and imagery. I love the subject matter! With your words you have woven a magic spell that softly wraps around the mind. Thank you for this.

*hugs, Cat

Thank you Cat! I enjoyed

Thank you Cat! I enjoyed writing this bit of fantasy, and glad you liked it.

Best

I love the title...

It is apparent right away, that this is a write of fantasy. The idea that the little butterflies are somehow attracted to her because they feel the energy of her and instinctively know that she loves them, is wonderful. Mother Nature sure has her antennae sending out vibes. The ending is like the fairy tales written by some of the craftsmen in the late 1800's and early 1900's.
Robert Southey, Charles Perrault, etc. Nicely done sir. ~ Geez.
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