My favorite pet is the one we do not own
But watch and maintain in their natural habitat
They deserve the right to be and exist without interference
For safety and the nature of our coexistence
They will need to be somewhat contained and population controlled
If it means that we are pushed a little closer
for that reason
So be it
We didn’t complain about living in townhomes
Or in Pods or racks
We made due
Given that all the space we truly
need is atop a yoga mat
Mar 13, 2024
Pet of Preference
About This Poem
Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Pet of Preference" appears to explore themes of cohabitation, respect for nature, and minimalism. The narrative voice seems to advocate for a balance between human needs and the rights of animals to exist in their natural habitats. This is a compelling perspective that could resonate with many readers.
However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of imagery and metaphor to enhance its emotional impact and depth. For instance, the mention of 'townhomes', 'Pods', and 'racks' is somewhat vague and could be developed further to create a more vivid picture of the human living conditions being compared to the natural habitats of animals.
The line "They will need to be somewhat contained and population controlled" could be interpreted in different ways. If it is referring to the animals, it might be worth considering whether this aligns with the poem's overall message of respect for nature and non-interference. If it refers to humans, this could be made clearer.
The final lines about the yoga mat suggest a minimalist lifestyle, but this idea is not fully integrated into the rest of the poem. Developing this theme earlier in the poem could help to create a more cohesive narrative.
In terms of structure, the poem is mostly free verse, with no consistent rhyme or meter. This is a valid stylistic choice, but the poem could benefit from more attention to rhythm and line breaks to enhance its musicality and readability. For example, the line "For safety and the nature of our coexistence" is somewhat longer than the others, which disrupts the rhythm.
Overall, the poem presents a thought-provoking perspective on human-animal cohabitation and minimalism, but could benefit from more consistent use of imagery, clearer metaphors, and attention to rhythm and structure.
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Yep...
After watching a documentary about living in the most crowded places in the world, I can tell you that, humans are as bad as any hive-minded animals, bugs or fowl. I see that we can, indeed survive in very minimal space. However, a lot of essential animals, bugs or fowl cannot, so we must allot space for them, that is not encroached upon by humans. Yeah, it could be smoothed out a bit, but I think you got your message out loud and clear.
~ Geez.
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Pet of Preference
Hello, Tawny,
Coexisting with nature and the elements. A fragile situation, especially if it is to be with little interference. There's nothing like watching animals in their natural habitat, but unfortunately we are spreading our lives into their homes. Very clever last two lines! Less is best!
Thank you!
L
Intriguing
You make a strong case in your poem. Thanks for sharing.