Structure should guide us
Fairness is granted to all
Peace in rules we trust.
Mar 13, 2024
Regulations
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Structure should guide us
Fairness is granted to all
Peace in rules we trust.
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem, "Regulations," is a Haiku, a traditional form of Japanese poetry that consists of three lines with a 5-7-5 syllable pattern. The poem adheres to this structure effectively, demonstrating a clear understanding of this form.
In terms of content, the poem presents an optimistic view of rules and regulations, suggesting they provide structure, fairness, and peace. However, the poem could benefit from the inclusion of more specific imagery or examples to illustrate these abstract concepts. As it stands, the poem's message is clear but somewhat generic.
The use of the word "granted" in the second line implies that fairness is a gift given by the rules. This is an interesting choice, and it could be further explored or clarified in the poem.
The final line, "Peace in rules we trust," effectively conveys the poem's central theme. However, the phrase "in rules we trust" is somewhat awkward. Consider revising this line for smoother syntax and flow.
Overall, the poem demonstrates a solid understanding of the Haiku form and presents a clear, if somewhat generic, message. To improve, consider incorporating more specific imagery or examples and revising for smoother syntax and flow.
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Dear Clentin,
This reminds me of a segment on an old television show; "Deep Thoughts, By Jack Handy" instead, it is "Really Deep Thoughts, By Clentin!" keep them coming!
*hugs, Cat
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