Compliment

I show her the poem
with the noisy words
building to a crescendo.

My scribbled paean, foolishly trying
to say these things to her
better than they’ve been said
by others, in ink on paper.

“Maybe I should tone all of this down some?”, I propose.

She smiles and says, “I like the clamor just the way it is.”

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

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Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski

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Comments

dear Michael,

aww that is so sweet she must be a grand 'ol gal!

*hugs, Cat

Indeed! Thanks for stopping

Indeed! Thanks for stopping by Cat!

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Compliment

Hello, Michael,
What a great final line, which I'm assuming she really said? This brought a smile to my face. So nice.
Thank you,
L

Yes. It's amazing how much of

Yes. It's amazing how much of my poetry can spring from such simple interactions. Thanks for your thoughts!

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You are welcome Dood! I was

You are welcome Dood! I was familiar with the word, but it's one of those words where the pronunciation seems to trip me up frequently. It has a lot of vowels - LOL! Thanks for sharing your thoughts!

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