It's like, what if moths
aren’t attracted to light,
as they flutter chaotically
around the source.
What if the thing we think
is pulling them closer confuses
which way they should go.
Love has been like that.
It's like, what if moths
aren’t attracted to light,
as they flutter chaotically
around the source.
What if the thing we think
is pulling them closer confuses
which way they should go.
Love has been like that.
Last Few Words: Inspired by an article about an interesting new theory about why insects seem attracted by light sources at night.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
brevity in poetry at its best
Brevity in poetry at its best.
Bravo, and well done!
Obi.
Thank you Obi! Very kind.
Thank you Obi! Very kind.
Best
To a Flame
Hello, Michael,
Another great write. Perfect final line.
L
Thanks for stopping by L!
Thanks for stopping by L! Glad you liked this one.
Best
;)
the last line makes it sing!
*always, Cat
Better the words than my
Better the words than my singing - LOL! Thank you Cat!
Best