Under The Influence

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem demonstrates a strong use of sensory imagery, particularly in the second and third stanzas where the tactile and olfactory senses are invoked. This helps to create an immersive experience for the reader. However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter to enhance its musicality and flow.

The first stanza has a clear ABAB rhyme scheme, but this is not maintained in the subsequent stanzas. Consistent rhyme schemes can help to create a sense of cohesion and rhythm in a poem. Consider revising the second and third stanzas to match the rhyme scheme established in the first stanza.

The poem also contains a few clichés, such as "a moment in time" and "opening a whole new door". While these phrases are not inherently problematic, they are often overused in poetry and can detract from the originality of the piece. Consider replacing these phrases with more unique and specific imagery to further enhance the poem's originality and emotional impact.

Lastly, the narrative of the poem could be clarified. The poem seems to describe a powerful and unexpected romantic encounter, but the specifics of this encounter and its consequences are somewhat vague. Providing more specific details or exploring the speaker's emotions in greater depth could help to create a more engaging and emotionally resonant narrative.

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This sounds like the beginning of something, hopefully good. Your use of tactile, olefactory, and visual sensation takes the reader into the moment. Nicely done.

Hello, Carrie,
This is definitely digging deeper for you - and I hope it's a sign of good things going on with you! Excited to read more like this!
Lx

Great poem Rose, I see you moving away from darkness to some light!
Loved it.