Nights That Last Forever

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The poem "Nights That Last Forever" presents an exploration of the human psyche during the night, with a focus on reflection, regret, and the search for hope. The poem's structure is consistent, with a regular rhyme scheme and meter, which helps to create a rhythm that carries the reader through the piece.

The use of personification, such as "demons will step on in" and "tragedy and despair from long ago make their presence felt once more," effectively conveys the poet's internal struggle. However, the poem could benefit from more concrete imagery to ground these abstract concepts and make them more relatable to the reader.

The rhetorical questions in the fourth stanza are a strong device for engaging the reader and encouraging them to reflect on their own experiences. However, the poem could benefit from exploring these questions more deeply, rather than moving on to a new topic in the next stanza.

The final stanza introduces a new theme of sleep and dreams. While this is a natural extension of the night-time setting, it feels somewhat disconnected from the earlier focus on regret and reflection. The poem could benefit from more clearly linking these themes, perhaps by exploring how dreams can offer a respite from the "endless second thoughts" mentioned earlier.

In terms of language, the poem generally uses a formal, elevated diction that suits its introspective tone. However, some phrases, such as "what may the darkness have in store," feel somewhat clichéd and could be replaced with more original expressions.

Overall, the poem effectively explores the theme of nighttime reflection and regret, but could benefit from more concrete imagery, deeper exploration of its themes, and more original language.

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Hello, Will,
This is very relatable - night time can bring about demons that mess with our minds and hearts. Things always seem so much worse at night. Appropriate title. The nights do seem to last forever in such situations. I'm wondering about using "companion" so close together in the 4th stanza. Perhaps find a synonym, or, if I'm interpreting the "light of day" reference correctly, use something similar to "savior" or "rescuer." (?) Wonderful final line to ponder over a bit.
Thank you!
L

in my opinion.

Tragedy and despair from long ago
Make their presence felt once more,
On these nights that seem to never end
(What may the darkness have in store?) this line has been over used in poetry

perhaps something like:

when sleep should be here to restore.
this is just a suggestion. or find your own alternate line Or disregard altogether.

Lavender is right, your poem is very relatable! very well written.

*hugs, Cat

I realize this poem is good enough to warrant more than just platitudes. So let me offer some ideas :
line 2, try "and usher all my demons in"
stanza 2 line1 try"Despairs and tragedies from long ago"
Stanza 3 line 1 "The decisions that I might have made"
stanza 3 line4 "Which swirl within my darkened sphere"
Well, that's all I have right now and please remember these are just ideas from an old scribbler

On rereading your excellent poem, I have come to the discovery that I like these lines best:

What happened to the quiet nights
When sleep was quick to make its fall?
Will dream filled nights ever come again
Or were they ever here at all?

the last line is "Killer!"

*hugs, Cat and eddy