I love like a faded polaroid in my wallet,
battered and bruised but kept safe through the years.
I love like a handwritten letter, graphite on paper,
scrawled out so carefully heartfelt and sincere.
I love like an oak loves it’s roots,
like an alcoholic loves his bourbon and beers.
When I find love, I don’t let go.
I sink my teeth into flesh and grip tight,
I break skin and lock eyes,
I reach out and take
what I want to be mine.
I will bark up this tree until it’s cut down,
I’ll love like a loyal dog, wretched and whining.
My old lupine legs may knock and may buckle,
but I will go to my grave howling I’m fine.
I love like planning road-trips, pins on a map,
and sitting around drinking 5 dollar red wine.
I love like “do you want coffee”, “how was your day”
and “darling please stay and forever be mine”.
Comments
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "The Way I Love" demonstrates a strong use of similes to convey the speaker's intense, enduring love. The similes, such as "I love like a faded polaroid in my wallet", "I love like a handwritten letter", and "I love like an oak loves it’s roots", are vivid and emotionally resonant, effectively communicating the speaker's perspective on love.
However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter. The lines vary greatly in length and syllable count, which can disrupt the flow of the poem and make it less engaging to read. Experimenting with a more consistent rhythm could enhance the poem's musicality and make it more impactful.
The poem also uses a mix of high and low diction, with phrases like "battered and bruised" and "wretched and whining" alongside more casual language like "how was your day" and "5 dollar red wine". This contrast can be effective, but it might be worth considering whether a more consistent tone would better serve the poem's themes and emotional impact.
Lastly, the poem's use of violent imagery, such as "I sink my teeth into flesh and grip tight, I break skin and lock eyes," is striking and memorable. However, it might be worth considering whether this imagery aligns with the overall message of the poem. If the speaker's love is meant to be seen as positive and enduring, this violent imagery could potentially confuse or alienate readers.
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